I've picked a particularly strong kissing scene from my manuscript not for the romance of the whole situation, but for the...passion? And when I say passion, I'm thinking hungry, aching, man-eating desire type of passion.
My WIP |
Acidic flooded my mouth and everything
I saw appeared to be covered in a haze of crimson satin.
Oh
no!
I started to take a step back, away
from David, but as I moved my eager tooth pricked my tongue and the delicious taste of
blood mingled with the acid in my saliva. Shock pulsated through my muscles, freezing
me into place.
My hands ached and my stomach
growled.
Before I could stop myself, I
lunged forward; in one fluid movement, my arms snatched up his shoulders and
shoved them into the trunk of a tree, heaving my chest against his. David’s breath
wheezed from his lungs. The ringing in my ears grew deafening as my neck jerked
toward him and my lips parted.
Without warning, my body gave one
last shove, driving my mouth to go in for the kill. He gasped as his fingers
laced around my waist and squeezed at my hips. His hands worked their way up my
back, clawing as they moved. I lost my focus and pulled my lips away from him.
My feet staggered backward until they tripped on a dead branch and I tumbled to
the ground, my rear thudding into the moist dirt floor.
“Wow,” David said with a heavy
breath. He propelled himself from the tree and reached his hand out to me.
Very cool. I love the kiss saving the guys life- at least for now.
ReplyDeleteThanks. Yes, at least for now. :)
DeleteCool twist at the end. This definitely has passion boiling throughout, as well. I love the vampire love/eat quandry. Very powerful.
ReplyDeleteThanks Shell. She's not a vampire though. :) She's a siren.
DeleteNice twist. Hot!
ReplyDeleteTotally unexpected, love it! What I love more is that you gave us such a slight glimpse into this story that I'm curious about who she is, who he is and what's going to happen to them. Nicely done.
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loved the kissing my meal kinda thing :) awesome writing and passion :) New follower, glad I found you :)
ReplyDeleteSo glad you guys liked it! I've been editing it for a while now and getting to the point where I wonder if I need to stop already and start submitting it or if I'm just getting tired of it cause I stink as a writer. So thanks for the encouragement. :)
ReplyDeletehey this was different and very nice. Kinda rough. lol. I liked it!
ReplyDeleteAwesome! I want to read more! Great heat and tension here and I love the line about kissing her meal :) I'm a Washington girl too :) Gotta love the rain!
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